First attempt of Match on action and 180 rule

                         

Preliminary Task
Working on match on action and the 180 rule

Screenplay (NEW)

SCENE 1

WEDDING CHAPEL

FREYA SMITH, roughly mid-twenties, long black hair with ruby red lips, dressed in a long white gown.

FREYA

Strides down the aisle alone, taking small but steady steps. At the end turns around and shares a mischievous smile with the audience.

Screen goes blank and a gunshot rings out.

SCENE 2

SMITH RESIDENCE IN KNIGHTBRIDGE  

MRS SMITH, Mid-thirties, with an aura of elegance and grace – dressed in a long well-designed red dress.

*Ladybird, Ladybird song playing softly in the background*

*Establishing shot of the mansion*

MRS SMITH

Since we were fifteen Charles, fifteen! (voice is slurred and raspy)

MR SMITH (Charles), Early forties, hair beginning to grey and thin, dressed in a classic Black Givenchy suit.

MR SMITH

Someone’s obviously been drinking a little to much (chuckles to guests) aside you are an embarrassment, behave yourself woman!

MRS SMITH

(Starts laughing hysterically) Do you hear that people? Behave woman, next I’ll be sent to the naughty step. Cheers to that everyone (takes a large sip of wine from her glass)

MR SMITH

(Grabs Mrs Smith wrist tightly and drags her outside) You snap out of this you hear me, you’re MY wife so I expect you to act in certain manner!

MRS SMITH

*Carries on laughing which turns into sobbing. Falls to her knees, clutching onto his trousers*

MR SMITH

(Roughly shoves her off him) Go clean yourself up

EXIT

MRS SMITH

(Clumsily stumbles through the hallways, singing and laughing) You’re no lady. What a state. A disgrace. No wife of mine (mocking Mr. Smith’s voice) Well fuck you, fuck your mistresses, fuck your… (breaks down crying, lights a cigarette and leaves on the curtains)

Trailer Notes

Trailer

PART 1

Wedding Chapel (setting)

Freya (character of focus)

Red lipstick, straight dark hair, white gown (costume)

·         Freya walks down the aisle in a white gown, at the end of the aisle Freya turns around and smiles.

·         The screen goes blank and the sound of a gunshot is heard.

PART 2

Ladybird, Labdybird (Song choice, eerie sounding “Mother Goose”)

Mr Smith and Mrs Smith (Characters)

Smudged makeup, cigarettes, long black dress

·         Establishing shot of the Smith Mansion

·         Vast ballroom filled with smartly dressed people

·         Argument arises between Mr Smith and Mrs Smith

·         Mrs Smith stumbles through the empty hallways, hysterically crying/laughing sets alight to the curtains nearby.

PART 3

Hostel (setting)

Freya, Girl 1, Girl 2 (characters)

Violence (theme of the scene)

·         Argument breaks out over a blanket

·         The two girls throw a punch Freya’s way

·         Freya lashed out and beats both girls who beg for mercy

·         Four girls start clapping and applaud Freya for her fighting skills.

·         Voice over of Freya’s voice “that’s where it all went wrong”

PART 4

Liquor store (setting)

Freya, Cass, Harriet, Keira, Erin (characters)

Mask, baseball bats, black attire (costume)

Violence (theme of scene)

·         Rob stores like delinquents

·         Cuts back and forth between partying, drug/alcohol abuse and robbing

·         On one rob Cass takes it too far and batters a man to death

PART 5

·         Meeting the gang (boy)

·         Freya and Erin disapprove

·         Showing the different ranks of power between the females and males

PART 6  

Voice over of Freya…

·         Having the girls lined up, laughing, chatting to each other

·         Title of the film is displayed etc…

Side note*  These are my notes that will have helped me to write each scene for my detailed and developed screen play.

Screenplay-editing

Scene 1

THE SMITH RESIDENCE IN KNIGHTSBRIDGE  

DINNING ROOM- EVENING

                      

MRS SMITH, mid thirties, with an aura of elegance and grace – dressed in a tight red pantsuit.

CHARLES (MR SMITH), late forties -- grey hairs starting to show through, dressed in a classic Black Givenchy suit.

MRS SMITH

   Why her? Why not me? Why not anyone else but her?

CHARLES

I don’t discuss your personal business, I would expect          you the extent me the same courtesy.

MRS SMITH

(Forcefully scraps her chair legs across the marbled floor)

 I’m your wife; I’m the woman with the ring, not her.

CHARLES

    Know your place woman. Sit.

SAMUEL SMITH, roughly twelve years old, handsome – dressed in a Gucci Slim fit tracksuit.

Scene 2

THE SMITH RESIDENCE

CHILDRENS PLAY ROOM- DAY

SAMUEL

     Freya Smith? Smith? You are a funny one aren’t you?

FREYA SMITH, ten seyears old, petite frame -- dark ringlets that cascade down her back.

FREYA

(Continues to write her name with different coloured pencils) Funny brother? I’m funny? (A high-pitched laugh escapes her mouth)

SAMUEL

  Brother? I’m no brother of yours. You’re a bastard, a sin! (Stalks towards Freya) We all know it, I know it, and Mother knows it, even Father. (Forcefully shoves Freya) You are no sister of mine!

Scene 3

THE SMITH RESISDENCE

BALL ROOM - NIGHT

MRS SMITH

    (Dressed in a red satin dress that exposes her bear shoulders, she stomps her way through the packed hallway)

I’m no wife. I’m property.

(Hands begin to tremble terribly as she tries to light a candle. Mrs. Smith falls to her knees, crying hysterically, dropping the lit match on to the curtains that hang behind her.)

Scene 4

HOSTEL – NIGHT

GIRL ONE, eighteen years old, rough looking with cheap taste.

GIRL ONE

    Who does this Puta think she is? (Directing her words towards Freya)

FREYA, now roughly seventeen

FREYA

                            

                       Me?

GRIL TWO, seventeen years old, a carbon copy of girl one

GIRL TWO

       Yes you

Alternative Ending - Film Treatment

*Second idea for the ending of my film treatment*

An eerie silence fills the crowded room, everyone suddenly turning to statues. Cass, Harriet and Keira rise from their chairs, gun in hand, Freya knew it was the end for her, shielding her eyes she await the impact. Three gunshots were fired simultaneously. The pain never came, what came was the spraying of blood that wasn’t her own. Cass, Harriet and Keira had shot the men that were charging for Freya. All four charged out of the church making their way for the 1967, Chevy Impala. 

Women in The Godfather

Women in gf from phoebe_10

The Men in The Godfather

Men in the godfather from phoebe_10